I'd like to compile the things that are approved/disapproved or and the critique...
I have no idea how much time I'll get (but some, for certain) for this, and I don't know how much this "outside of channels" communication will matter.
But if you're interested... here's a chance.
Note: This is directed specifically to the revision of the draft (or what it should be, reasonably). I'm going to keep this to the topic, narrowly. Strictly salient posts about meaningful revision for good and useful cause--or I'll delete them.